下午 01:35:16
Elsa
Well, wating for Claire
2009/1/9
下午 01:35:34
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
ok
2009/1/9
下午 01:37:27
Claire
Here I come~
2009/1/9
下午 01:38:12
蘇菲亞
1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why? Title: Could Gay be Gay? Key words: Gay I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so.
2009/1/9
下午 01:38:25
蘇菲亞
However, I found mostly English version.
2009/1/9
下午 01:38:34
Claire
Wow~
2009/1/9
下午 01:39:18
Elsa
You just use a key word "Gay"?
2009/1/9
下午 01:39:25
蘇菲亞
Yes
2009/1/9
下午 01:39:44
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
and then you could find many articles
2009/1/9
下午 01:39:53
蘇菲亞
now that it is a broad topic it is easy to find information.
2009/1/9
下午 01:39:56
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so great and convenient
2009/1/9
下午 01:40:59
Elsa
Then, you must be tired to find the information you want. Because there are too many information
2009/1/9
下午 01:41:05
Claire
Both English and Chinese?
2009/1/9
下午 01:41:38
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
and maybe you can narrow your key words
2009/1/9
下午 01:42:13
蘇菲亞
But I ONLY USE ONE WORD
2009/1/9
下午 01:43:08
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so the information you find may to be too broad for you
2009/1/9
下午 01:43:12
Elsa
That's ok. If you can find the source you want.
2009/1/9
下午 01:43:24
Claire
There must have lots of article
2009/1/9
下午 01:43:37
Elsa
But you might spend more time.
2009/1/9
下午 01:44:07
蘇菲亞
So what do you think I shoul;ld type?
2009/1/9
下午 01:44:49
Claire
So you do the topic in extensive way?
2009/1/9
下午 01:44:57
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
the topic you choose may to broad for you
2009/1/9
下午 01:45:37
蘇菲亞
SO WHAT SHOULD I DO
2009/1/9
下午 01:46:44
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
you can try to key in the keywords longer and explain detailly about your subject
2009/1/9
下午 01:46:48
Elsa
It depends on what aspects you want to discuss.
2009/1/9
下午 01:46:55
Claire
To narrow down the certain point of gay
2009/1/9
下午 01:48:55
蘇菲亞
OK
2009/1/9
下午 01:49:18
蘇菲亞
( 1 ) Ideology- Queer Cinema. Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey. Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies. I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
2009/1/9
下午 01:49:28
蘇菲亞
This is my citation
2009/1/9
下午 01:49:39
蘇菲亞
The answer to the second question
2009/1/9
下午 01:50:15
蘇菲亞
( 2 ) Gay Genes, Revisited. LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844) Intended audiences: Academic paper.
2009/1/9
下午 01:50:23
蘇菲亞
The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view. Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
2009/1/9
下午 01:50:44
蘇菲亞
Do Gays Have a Choice? Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303) From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9 Intended audiences: Academic paper.
2009/1/9
下午 01:51:09
蘇菲亞
The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
2009/1/9
下午 01:51:22
蘇菲亞
( 4 ) Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan. Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
2009/1/9
下午 01:51:30
蘇菲亞
( 5 ) Could Gay be Gay? Anonymous Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1 Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
2009/1/9
下午 01:51:52
蘇菲亞
That's all to the second question.
2009/1/9
下午 01:51:56
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
the first citation :i think it is great that you use the book we have studied in this semester as your reference
2009/1/9
下午 01:52:17
蘇菲亞
The fact is you have to attack me
2009/1/9
下午 01:52:24
Claire
Ideology!!!Interesting!(When night is falling )
2009/1/9
下午 01:52:37
蘇菲亞
I don't know whether I had do the citation properly.
2009/1/9
下午 01:52:48
Elsa
Ha
2009/1/9
下午 01:53:06
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
the idea is great
2009/1/9
下午 01:53:12
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
BUT
2009/1/9
下午 01:53:19
蘇菲亞
BUT
2009/1/9
下午 01:54:32
Elsa
How do you use the second reference in your final paper? Since you said you are confused about that.
2009/1/9
下午 01:54:56
蘇菲亞
OH YEAH
2009/1/9
下午 01:55:17
蘇菲亞
I mean some of the idea it mentioned in the article.
2009/1/9
下午 01:55:25
蘇菲亞
Thanks
2009/1/9
下午 01:55:28
Claire
Because it's a academic paper ?
2009/1/9
下午 01:55:32
蘇菲亞
I WOULD REVISE THE SENTENSE
2009/1/9
下午 01:55:37
蘇菲亞
Yes
2009/1/9
下午 01:56:42
Elsa
You can add that if you agree with the standpoints in the sources.
2009/1/9
下午 01:56:57
Claire
Are there lot of new terms should be explained?
2009/1/9
下午 01:57:14
蘇菲亞
No.
2009/1/9
下午 01:57:31
蘇菲亞
It's not the term but the words it used in the articles.
2009/1/9
下午 01:58:50
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so you creat th eterm by tourself?
2009/1/9
下午 01:59:07
Claire
So how do you overcpme the problem?
2009/1/9
下午 01:59:08
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
sorry foe misspelling
2009/1/9
下午 01:59:26
Elsa
miss spelling: )
2009/1/9
下午 01:59:26
Claire
Sorry~
2009/1/9
下午 01:59:33
Claire
overcome
2009/1/9
下午 01:59:33
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
XDDDDDDDD
2009/1/9
下午 01:59:38
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
C
2009/1/9
下午 01:59:39
Claire
ha
2009/1/9
下午 02:00:07
蘇菲亞
the
2009/1/9
下午 02:00:12
蘇菲亞
create
2009/1/9
下午 02:00:50
Claire
?
2009/1/9
下午 02:01:31
Elsa
I want to be the next to present.
2009/1/9
下午 02:01:38
Claire
Ok~
2009/1/9
下午 02:01:41
蘇菲亞
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them? I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
2009/1/9
下午 02:02:06
蘇菲亞
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper? I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
2009/1/9
下午 02:02:27
蘇菲亞
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not? I did add my peer’s opinion in my issue paper because they pointed out the shortcomings that I did not realize before.
2009/1/9
下午 02:02:48
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so do you paraphrase the qoutes
2009/1/9
下午 02:02:58
蘇菲亞
Before i want to change my position and focus on the cutural environment
2009/1/9
下午 02:03:26
蘇菲亞
but i found out that all of the infromation that i have found was about the scientific problems
2009/1/9
下午 02:03:37
蘇菲亞
yes i do qoute
2009/1/9
下午 02:04:13
Elsa
So you need to find more evidence instead of the scientific problems
2009/1/9
下午 02:04:28
Claire
What words do you quote?
2009/1/9
下午 02:04:50
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
the most important thing is you need to paraphrase them in your own ideas
2009/1/9
下午 02:05:11
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
did you do that?(attacking)
2009/1/9
下午 02:05:43
蘇菲亞
(i can feel that
2009/1/9
下午 02:06:03
蘇菲亞
it's hard to say it over here
2009/1/9
下午 02:06:07
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
i know that you have paraphrased them
2009/1/9
下午 02:06:24
蘇菲亞
i had put the quotation mark in my paragraph
2009/1/9
下午 02:06:37
蘇菲亞
actually i quote
2009/1/9
下午 02:06:53
蘇菲亞
and also paraphrased
2009/1/9
下午 02:07:20
Claire
Do you have coherence between the paragraph?
2009/1/9
下午 02:08:09
Elsa
Some conjunctions
2009/1/9
下午 02:08:23
蘇菲亞
I...am not sure about that
2009/1/9
下午 02:08:35
蘇菲亞
i think i did....吧
2009/1/9
下午 02:09:06
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
do make the mistake as same as me
2009/1/9
下午 02:09:11
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
don't
2009/1/9
下午 02:09:19
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
the same mistake
2009/1/9
下午 02:09:51
Elsa
Well. You can do it better when you looking your sentence again.
2009/1/9
下午 02:10:03
蘇菲亞
ok
2009/1/9
下午 02:10:05
Claire
Check it again!
2009/1/9
下午 02:10:10
蘇菲亞
so is that all?
2009/1/9
下午 02:10:15
蘇菲亞
OK!
2009/1/9
下午 02:10:29
Claire
probably~
2009/1/9
下午 02:11:07
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
when i read your annatation, i find that overally there are not some serious problems in your article
2009/1/9
下午 02:11:23
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
the grammar and spelling is ok
2009/1/9
下午 02:11:36
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
the coherence is not too bad
2009/1/9
下午 02:11:54
Elsa
You did a good job.
2009/1/9
下午 02:11:59
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
but you stll have to polish them into a btter one
2009/1/9
下午 02:12:01
Claire
serious problems?
2009/1/9
下午 02:12:03
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
better
2009/1/9
下午 02:12:05
Claire
So?
2009/1/9
下午 02:12:17
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
the conjuntions
2009/1/9
下午 02:12:29
Elsa
conjunctions
2009/1/9
下午 02:12:32
Claire
OH! OK
2009/1/9
下午 02:14:15
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
THE MIS SPELLING AGAIN!!
2009/1/9
下午 02:14:28
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so the next parts?
2009/1/9
下午 02:15:05
Elsa
I can start to present
2009/1/9
下午 02:15:10
Elsa
?
2009/1/9
下午 02:15:11
Claire
OK
2009/1/9
下午 02:15:19
Claire
Abortion!
2009/1/9
下午 02:15:43
Elsa
Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right
2009/1/9
下午 02:16:43
Elsa
key words:abortion, women's human rights
2009/1/9
下午 02:17:10
Elsa
I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.
2009/1/9
下午 02:17:32
Elsa
1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion) 2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws) 3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)
2009/1/9
下午 02:18:13
Elsa
That's the outlines of my paper.
2009/1/9
下午 02:18:54
Elsa
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences
2009/1/9
下午 02:19:12
Elsa
1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right. Audience: People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.
2009/1/9
下午 02:21:15
Claire
So you emphasize women's human rights?
2009/1/9
下午 02:21:30
Elsa
Yes.
2009/1/9
下午 02:21:42
Elsa
That's my main point.
2009/1/9
下午 02:21:50
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
yap
2009/1/9
下午 02:21:54
Claire
Do you have other position?
2009/1/9
下午 02:21:57
Claire
Law ?
2009/1/9
下午 02:22:15
Claire
Law of abortion!
2009/1/9
下午 02:22:16
Elsa
Yes.
2009/1/9
下午 02:22:27
Claire
you say you want to mention
2009/1/9
下午 02:22:31
Elsa
(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.
2009/1/9
下午 02:22:50
Elsa
Audience: People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.
2009/1/9
下午 02:23:13
Elsa
4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton. Audience: People who want to know why be anti-abortion
2009/1/9
下午 02:23:14
蘇菲亞
I THINK THAT YOUR VIEWPOINT IS CLEAR
2009/1/9
下午 02:23:18
蘇菲亞
AND PRECISE
2009/1/9
下午 02:23:32
Claire
Yup~
2009/1/9
下午 02:24:11
Elsa
Thank you!
2009/1/9
下午 02:24:29
Elsa
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them? (1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually. (2) Those reasons can make people to t
2009/1/9
下午 02:24:45
Elsa
(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion. (3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws. (4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.
2009/1/9
下午 02:24:59
Claire
Is any problem you encounter in your paper?
2009/1/9
下午 02:25:02
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
and you make three points in your paper
2009/1/9
下午 02:25:05
蘇菲亞
SO YOU QOUTE
2009/1/9
下午 02:25:18
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
discuss the three reasons
2009/1/9
下午 02:26:03
Elsa
I do qoute some words in my article
2009/1/9
下午 02:26:19
Elsa
But not much.
2009/1/9
下午 02:26:31
蘇菲亞
OK
2009/1/9
下午 02:26:46
Claire
What peron do you quote?
2009/1/9
下午 02:27:04
蘇菲亞
I THINK EVERYBODY'S PROBLEMS IS THAT WE SHOULD CHECK THE SPELLING
2009/1/9
下午 02:27:11
蘇菲亞
THE COHERENCE
2009/1/9
下午 02:27:20
蘇菲亞
THE CONJUNCTION
2009/1/9
下午 02:27:40
Elsa
Yes. So the peer feedback is important
2009/1/9
下午 02:27:53
Elsa
I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.
2009/1/9
下午 02:28:28
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
YES I ALSO AGREE THAT
2009/1/9
下午 02:28:30
Elsa
To the fifth question.
2009/1/9
下午 02:28:33
Elsa
(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
2009/1/9
下午 02:29:02
Elsa
2) I added more ideas to my final paper 1. The world trend 2. The uniqe condition of each woman 3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)
2009/1/9
下午 02:29:05
蘇菲亞
ok
2009/1/9
下午 02:29:21
蘇菲亞
so you have stated your position
2009/1/9
下午 02:29:24
蘇菲亞
that's cool
2009/1/9
下午 02:29:38
Claire
Pefect~
2009/1/9
下午 02:29:55
Elsa
But I do not know how to conquer the weak point
2009/1/9
下午 02:30:24
Elsa
I just avoid to talk about that part...
2009/1/9
下午 02:30:45
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
it is really hard to correct
2009/1/9
下午 02:30:57
蘇菲亞
if i were you, i would also avoid that part...
2009/1/9
下午 02:31:00
蘇菲亞
sorry
2009/1/9
下午 02:31:11
蘇菲亞
let me think an\bout that
2009/1/9
下午 02:31:11
Claire
The coherence?
2009/1/9
下午 02:32:04
Elsa
Well... I am not sure whether my articles is coherent or not
2009/1/9
下午 02:32:08
Claire
do you work strongly?
2009/1/9
下午 02:32:15
Claire
And.........
2009/1/9
下午 02:33:00
Claire
you told me that you have 6 pages "only"
2009/1/9
下午 02:33:16
Elsa
I would try to make my article fluent
2009/1/9
下午 02:33:49
蘇菲亞
i think we should go on to the next person
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:01
Elsa
Ok.
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:09
Claire
Mmmmm.....
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:10
蘇菲亞
what is human right
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:23
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
OK
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:25
蘇菲亞
i mean at the same time now
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:26
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
I'M NEXT
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:48
Claire
Elsa works very hard!
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:52
蘇菲亞
because elsa and claire had the same topic
2009/1/9
下午 02:34:57
蘇菲亞
almost the same
2009/1/9
下午 02:35:18
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
SO CLAIRE
2009/1/9
下午 02:35:18
Claire
different position
2009/1/9
下午 02:35:27
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
YOUR ARE THE NEXT ONE?
2009/1/9
下午 02:35:50
Elsa
So hurry up
2009/1/9
下午 02:36:04
Claire
I'm ok
2009/1/9
下午 02:36:22
Elsa
Tell us the outlines in your paper
2009/1/9
下午 02:36:28
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
or i will lose my time = =
2009/1/9
下午 02:36:44
Claire
abotion mental health
2009/1/9
下午 02:36:49
Claire
abortion
2009/1/9
下午 02:37:04
蘇菲亞
together
2009/1/9
下午 02:38:10
Claire
My main outline includes abortion, and I would quote others to persuade others by using lot of science research and essay. The key words are the mental help, and psychology of abortion. Most information are English, because there are much more information what I want in the foreign website.
2009/1/9
下午 02:38:35
Claire
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97, Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News, , and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
2009/1/9
下午 02:38:36
蘇菲亞
mental help, and psychology of abortion.
2009/1/9
下午 02:38:49
蘇菲亞
so you deal with the mental problem
2009/1/9
下午 02:39:13
Claire
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97, Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News, , and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
2009/1/9
下午 02:39:17
Claire
Yes
2009/1/9
下午 02:39:46
Claire
psychology of abortion
2009/1/9
下午 02:41:07
Elsa
So how did you deal with the other points of view such as woman's right?
2009/1/9
下午 02:41:29
Claire
I choose to be pro-lifer.
2009/1/9
下午 02:41:35
Elsa
How did you conquer the weak point?
2009/1/9
下午 02:41:55
Claire
I use others' words
2009/1/9
下午 02:42:01
蘇菲亞
or baby's right
2009/1/9
下午 02:42:05
Claire
such as the Pope
2009/1/9
下午 02:42:07
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
yap
2009/1/9
下午 02:42:26
蘇菲亞
baby's psychological problem
2009/1/9
下午 02:42:57
Claire
It's psychological problem of women
2009/1/9
下午 02:43:03
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
i agree with sophia
2009/1/9
下午 02:43:56
Claire
Do you mean that I should develop baby's psychological problem?
2009/1/9
下午 02:44:23
Claire
Then I can try.
2009/1/9
下午 02:44:34
蘇菲亞
no
2009/1/9
下午 02:44:37
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
if you have enough time
2009/1/9
下午 02:44:42
Claire
Ok
2009/1/9
下午 02:44:47
蘇菲亞
because that's also elsa's problem
2009/1/9
下午 02:44:52
Claire
Thanks
2009/1/9
下午 02:45:01
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
otherwise you must reorganize your issue paper
2009/1/9
下午 02:45:11
蘇菲亞
both of you focus on the adults
2009/1/9
下午 02:45:30
Claire
Yea
2009/1/9
下午 02:45:31
蘇菲亞
or don't point out the word "baby"
2009/1/9
下午 02:45:38
Elsa
I see.
2009/1/9
下午 02:45:51
蘇菲亞
otherwise you will have confrontation in your paper
2009/1/9
下午 02:45:56
Claire
OK
2009/1/9
下午 02:46:01
蘇菲亞
joyce
2009/1/9
下午 02:46:09
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
ok
2009/1/9
下午 02:46:11
Claire
come to Joyce!!
2009/1/9
下午 02:46:30
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
2009/1/9
下午 02:46:34
Claire
Go ahead!
2009/1/9
下午 02:46:48
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
this is my topic(present)
2009/1/9
下午 02:47:10
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
Focus on three parts: 1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery 2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery 3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
2009/1/9
下午 02:47:37
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so i make a deep discussion about these three topics
2009/1/9
下午 02:47:58
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
Search information in the key words English > “self image” “plastic surgery” Mostly in the website of the “All Business” http://www.allbusiness.com/ Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand website全國碩博士論文資訊網 http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
2009/1/9
下午 02:48:51
Elsa
I think that your standpoints are clear.
2009/1/9
下午 02:48:59
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
thx
2009/1/9
下午 02:49:24
蘇菲亞
but
2009/1/9
下午 02:49:40
蘇菲亞
i don't know your viewpoints
2009/1/9
下午 02:49:53
蘇菲亞
you support?
2009/1/9
下午 02:49:55
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
this is just the outline
2009/1/9
下午 02:50:10
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
my ideas will be in the article
2009/1/9
下午 02:50:41
蘇菲亞
ok
2009/1/9
下午 02:50:46
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
i just categoly them
2009/1/9
下午 02:50:47
蘇菲亞
just remind you
2009/1/9
下午 02:51:07
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
i know that i will pay more attentio non this part
2009/1/9
下午 02:51:30
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
it is also my main problem thx for Sophia
2009/1/9
下午 02:52:20
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
2009/1/9
下午 02:52:35
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
2009/1/9
下午 02:52:45
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
2009/1/9
下午 02:52:55
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
2009/1/9
下午 02:53:00
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so much = =
2009/1/9
下午 02:53:46
Claire
From TV! It's cool.
2009/1/9
下午 02:53:54
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
every annotation stands for one point
2009/1/9
下午 02:54:04
蘇菲亞
AND SALES
2009/1/9
下午 02:54:08
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so there are three stand points
2009/1/9
下午 02:54:16
蘇菲亞
YOU FIND LOTS OF INFORMATION
2009/1/9
下午 02:54:28
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
haha
2009/1/9
下午 02:54:33
Elsa
Don't forget to express your views when you use them.
2009/1/9
下午 02:54:39
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
are you praising me?
2009/1/9
下午 02:54:47
蘇菲亞
IN THE CONCLUSION PART YOU MIGHT WANT TO ORGANIZE THEM AGAIN IN BRIEF WORDS
2009/1/9
下午 02:55:08
Claire
What keywords do you use?
2009/1/9
下午 02:55:23
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
i have said that = =in the above
2009/1/9
下午 02:55:27
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
attacking
2009/1/9
下午 02:55:48
Claire
OH~sorry
2009/1/9
下午 02:56:05
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
2009/1/9
下午 02:56:11
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery The higher standard about aesthetic >contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
2009/1/9
下午 02:56:41
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-imThis article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives. age psychology
2009/1/9
下午 02:57:16
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance. The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
2009/1/9
下午 02:57:42
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Film clip The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
2009/1/9
下午 02:57:53
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so much = =
2009/1/9
下午 02:58:10
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
every annatation stands for one point
2009/1/9
下午 02:58:28
Elsa
Do you have problems when you use these information?
2009/1/9
下午 02:58:42
蘇菲亞
for example the meaning
2009/1/9
下午 02:58:49
蘇菲亞
or some conflict
2009/1/9
下午 02:59:07
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
yes, at first i can't find any essay on the internet
2009/1/9
下午 02:59:48
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
after a long long stuggling, i found and useful website
2009/1/9
下午 03:00:15
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
that's the begining of my annatation
2009/1/9
下午 03:00:34
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
that's why i post my articles in the blogger so late
2009/1/9
下午 03:00:53
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
so sophia has pointed out that
2009/1/9
下午 03:01:57
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
2009/1/9
下午 03:02:31
蘇菲亞
i think that you could qoate
2009/1/9
下午 03:02:40
蘇菲亞
sometimes directly
2009/1/9
下午 03:02:48
蘇菲亞
to be more persuasive
2009/1/9
下午 03:03:09
Elsa
Yes.
2009/1/9
下午 03:04:29
Elsa
Using the words from convincing resouces will helpful
2009/1/9
下午 03:04:37
Claire
That's right~
2009/1/9
下午 03:06:20
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
yap i agree with you
2009/1/9
下午 03:06:30
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
i will improve that
2009/1/9
下午 03:08:25
蘇菲亞
SO ANY PROBLEMS?
2009/1/9
下午 03:08:30
蘇菲亞
?
2009/1/9
下午 03:08:47
蘇菲亞
DID YOU CHANGE YOUR POSITION
2009/1/9
下午 03:09:08
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
I THINK NOT
2009/1/9
下午 03:09:18
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
I AGREE WITH THE POINTS
2009/1/9
下午 03:09:56
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
and i agree with the attitude toward cosmetic surgery
2009/1/9
下午 03:10:53
Elsa
If there is no problems...
2009/1/9
下午 03:11:09
[ 耐心 patient] ：)
this is the end maybe
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