Final Paper

羅友君 (Elsa, 961002013)
English Composition IIA
Professor Liang
Final paper

Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right

Having an abortion is a common phenomenon which can be seen around the world. Women may decide to quit her pregnancy because of various reasons. Taking an example from our society, September is called as a month of abortion in Taiwan. Abortion is also a controversial issue when it comes to the election of president in America last year. There is a report of BBC radio website indicates that one in four UK women have had a termination and the number is on the rise. Therefore, the problem that how to make the choice between morality and women’s right comes to my mind. Personally, I approve that women have the right to perform the operation of abortion. No woman would make such decision casually, and we should respect women’s right of terminating or proceeding with the pregnancy.

Women should have the right of abortion because it is undeniable that women are the one who endure the torture during the pregnancy and the result of having abortion. My standpoints have in common with Obama, the President-elect in America, who thinks that abortion is about women’s right. According to the videos I found out from Youtube, Obama claimed that the law of limiting abortion would influence, even harm women’s rights. In another report of Yahoo news online, it mentioned that an Australian state, Victoria, is going to pass a bill which give women the sole choice of whether to have abortion or not. Currently, woman there can abort only when the doctor thinks pregnancy would harm the health of the mother. The bill progresses despite opposition. The information reflects the attitude of the administration toward the issue. Abortion becomes an issue which trigger the debate by governments, the perspective toward abortion even influence the relationship between people and governments.

Looking from the other points of view, the anti-abortion groups put emphasis on the human rights of the unborn babies. Pro-life activists hold a perspective that abortion is equal to murder. Pro-life refers to disagreement to abortion and support for fetus’ right. Fetus has the right to live, and should be treated as an independent human being even when they are still in mother’s womb. Through the opposite standpoints above, we can understand that the issue is really a dilemma for governments to deal with. The reason for them to be against to abortion is mainly by morality. However, do women have no rights to abort if she does not want to have a child? Does a woman who gets pregnant unexpectedly have to abort her baby covertly in illegal clinic?

To solve the problems, we should know the reason why women choose to have abortions at first. A news documentary on BBC radio website investigated the women who had chosen to have an abortion. One of the women who was interviewed said that “I don't regret what I did and I still don't regret not telling my parents as I know they would have taken control, 16 is too young to have a baby, you are still so young yourself, go out and enjoy yourself before settling down, I now have 2 children and have the maturity to enjoy them.” Besides, in a news report of BBC website discussed about the reasons for abortion. Women may decide to have abortion for social reasons such as poverty. The family can not afford to raise a child, or the mother is too young to keep a child. In addition, the child is the result of crimes such as rape and incest, the mother’s health problems which includes mental health, the serious physical handicaps of the children, the birth control policy of the government, and the parents’ gender selection. These are the general factors for women to choose abortions.

After understanding the reasons and motivations for a woman to have abortion, we can find out that it is really complicated for a woman to abort her child. We can not just define abortion as murder, because we do not know what difficulties the woman exactly goes through. If those pro-life activists consider about the unique situation of each woman, they would not put abortion in such way. To have abortions is never a simple choice for women. It is not just a question to give birth to the child or not. What women should face is the responsibility. Once you choose to give birth to the child, you are responsible to raise and educate him or her. A large amount of time and money are needed, the parents’ mental condition should be ready for have a child, too. If the woman’s economic situation does not allow her to keep her child, what can she do after her child come to the world? Abandon her baby or send her baby to an orphanage? There must be some obstacles for a mother to make the decision of aborting her baby. If the government restricts women’s abortion rights, it may result in the damage of women’s health, illegal abortion and abandoned babies would become an even larger problem to the society.

Misunderstanding often happens when people forget to think for each other. In a magazine named The Crisis has a report “March for women’s lives” which introduces the march about women who strives for their abortion rights. Women are struggling to get their rights of choosing whether they should abort or not by themselves. Actually, women are the protagonists of the problem, and they should have the dominance to make the decision.

In contrast to pro-life, pro-choice refers to a view that whether a woman wants to have an abortion or not, the fertility rights should be given without restriction. Pro- choice advocates insist on that a woman should have the complete control over the choice to terminate or continue the pregnancy. They emphasize on the point that having a child is a personal choice which would affect woman’s body and health. It would be better if the government allows women to have abortions. They put abortion as a kind of “individual liberty”, and every woman should have “reproductive rights” as well. Furthermore, pro-choice supporters also consider abortion as an issue of bodily autonomy. Since the embryo is a part of a woman’s body, the woman should have the right to control over it. It is necessary to respect individual woman’s choices.

To discuss about the part of the abortion right, here is a research about abortion law in different countries. According to the research paper “Developments in Laws on Induced Abortion: 1998-2007” in the journal of International Family Planning Perspectives, we can know the main trend of the legislation about abortion in different countries during 1998 to 2007. The research divides the countries into five categories according to their abortion laws. In the first category are countries whose laws permit abortion to save woman’s life. Nearly 26% of the world’s people live in the 68 countries in this category. The second category includes countries whose laws permit abortion to protect a woman’s physical health. Almost 10% of the world’s people live in the 35 countries in the category. Countries in the third category have laws that explicitly recognize threats to mental health as justification for abortion. Twenty-three countries, 4% of the world’s population have such laws. Countries in the fourth category take woman’s social and economic circumstances into account. Fourteen countries, about 20% of the world’s proportion are in the category. The last category contains countries that permit abortion without restriction. Fifty-six countries, representing almost 40% of the world’s people, have laws in this category. During the last ten years, sixteen countries have increased the number of grounds on which abortions may be legally performed. Even the countries have prohibited abortion by its laws allow a part of abortion when pregnancy would hurt the mother's health. Only two countries added restriction to their abortion laws.

It is obvious that liberalization of abortion laws is the main trend during the last ten years around the world. More countries have broadened the grounds of legal abortion. Banning abortion under all the conditions is impossible. Permitting abortion increases women's human rights, because a woman can be the master of her own body. Women would not be forced to accept the children who are not expected. Women are in the first place of this issue of abortion. To restrict abortions not only harm women’s human rights, but also make the secret and dangerous abortions increase. By the normal access to abortions can help women stay in a safer medical treatment. If the government liberalizes the laws and makes the aborted procedures more accessible, it can reduce women's maternal mortality or morbidity, the number of deaths and the after effects. Women do not have to worry about the danger of accepting a secret procedure. If a woman considers to aborting her child, the government should provide her enough information and the result of abortion, instead of limiting women’s rights to abortion. When a woman understand what abortion is, how the procedure be performed, and think about why she choose to abort her baby, she would make the most appropriate decision by herself.

It can be questioned that are those who opposed to abortion really caring about women’s circumstances? Have they ever stood in women’s position? In an article “The Female Nature: A Woman's Destiny?” in the Journal of Humanist takes partial-birth abortion for example. The Congress of United States prohibits partial-birth because they think that the procedure is inhumane. There is a Justice wrote about why abortion should be banned. “Whether to have an abortion requires a difficult and painful moral decision … it seems unexceptional to conclude some women come to regret their choice to about the infant life they once created and sustained.” They supposed that a woman would and should regret for having an abortion. Abortion violates a woman’s motherhood. Therefore, the government should prohibit abortion. Nevertheless, abortion is not an issue which concerns about a woman’s motherhood, but the individual liberty and bodily autonomy. When a woman decides to have an abortion, it does not mean she is a cruel person. It just indicates the woman faces some troubles so that she has to terminate her pregnancy. The other article “Abortion: we need compassion, not dogma” in the Journal of New Statesman mentions about the “pro-life” campaigners. Their aim is to stop abortion completely. Even when the limit time of abortion is cut from 24 to 20 weeks, their concern is not to save the babies who are terminated between 20 and 24 weeks, but to use a lower limit as a stepping stone to an outright ban. Most of them are motivated by religious or philosophical purpose. We can see that women’s thoughts are usually to be neglected. The government, humanists, and the clergies intend to limit women’s right to have abortions. Regardless of each woman’s unique situation, what a woman need is usually ignored. Why can they force woman to accept their arbitrary decision? When it comes to a woman’s set of circumstances, we should respect the necessity of women to make such choice in the first place. There is no denying that women are the roles who involve in the issue. Do those who oppose abortion really know what situation a woman goes through? Or they just limit women’s rights by the slogan of humanism?

Morality, dogma, and humanism is the main standpoints for those who oppose to abortion. The pro-life supporters care about the unborn baby more than the expectant mother. Nevertheless, the role mother plays is actually the most important one. The mother has to face all the problems when she decides to give birth to her baby. What women need is compassion, instead of the dogma and condemnation. Anti-abortion groups condemn women’s behavior of aborting the babies, but such condemnation is meaningless if they can not provide any way to solve the complicated condition of each woman and the problems each woman face.

In conclusion, the reasons for abortion are diverse when it comes to each woman’s particular circumstance. Nowadays, liberalizing abortion laws has become the tendency in the world. The government should make the information about abortion and the aborted procedures become more accessible. Respect for individual women is significant. Women can and must be trusted to make fundamental personal decisions in a free society. Every woman has the right to control her own body and to determine when or whether to bear a child.








References

JPickD provided. Barack Obama – Abortion (2008, January 4). Retrieved October 15, 2008, from Youtube Web site: http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=TCifpbfQlOM

Australian abortion bill progresses despite opposition (2008, September 12) Retrieved September 24, 2008, from Yahoo news online Web site: http://ca.news.yahoo.com/s/afp/080912/health/australia_abortion_health

Abortion: A simple choice? (2008, May 20) Retrieved September 24,2008, from BBC Radio Web site: http://www.bbc.co.uk/1xtra/tx/documentaries/abortion.shtml

Cassie M. Chew (2004, July/August). March for Women’s Lives. The Crisis, Vol. 83,
14-15. Retrieved October 15, 2008, from Academic Premier database.

Reasons for abortion. (2005, February 8). Retrieved October 20, 2008, from BBC Web site: http://www.bbc.co.uk/ethics/abortion/legal/when_1.shtml

Boland, Reed & Katzive, Laura (2008, September). Developments in Laws on Induced Abortion: 1998-2007. International Family Planning Perspectives, Vol. 34, 110-120. Retrieved November 13, 2008, from Academic Premier database.

Karen Frantz. (2007, July/August) The Female Nature: A Woman's Destiny? Journal of Humanist, Vol. 67, p4-6. Retrieved December 11,2008, from Academic Premier database.

Howard & Michael. (March 21,2005) Abortion: we need compassion, not dogma. Journal of New StatesmanVol. 134 Issue 4732, p6-6. Retrieved December 11, 2008, from Academic Search Premier database.

Discussion of the final paper (msn)

2009/1/9

下午 01:35:16

Elsa


Well, wating for Claire
2009/1/9

下午 01:35:34

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


ok
2009/1/9

下午 01:37:27

Claire


Here I come~
2009/1/9

下午 01:38:12

蘇菲亞


1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why? Title: Could Gay be Gay? Key words: Gay I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so.
2009/1/9

下午 01:38:25

蘇菲亞


However, I found mostly English version.
2009/1/9

下午 01:38:34

Claire


Wow~
2009/1/9

下午 01:39:18

Elsa


You just use a key word "Gay"?
2009/1/9

下午 01:39:25

蘇菲亞


Yes
2009/1/9

下午 01:39:44

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and then you could find many articles
2009/1/9

下午 01:39:53

蘇菲亞


now that it is a broad topic it is easy to find information.
2009/1/9

下午 01:39:56

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so great and convenient
2009/1/9

下午 01:40:59

Elsa


Then, you must be tired to find the information you want. Because there are too many information
2009/1/9

下午 01:41:05

Claire


Both English and Chinese?
2009/1/9

下午 01:41:38

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and maybe you can narrow your key words
2009/1/9

下午 01:42:13

蘇菲亞


But I ONLY USE ONE WORD
2009/1/9

下午 01:43:08

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so the information you find may to be too broad for you
2009/1/9

下午 01:43:12

Elsa


That's ok. If you can find the source you want.
2009/1/9

下午 01:43:24

Claire


There must have lots of article
2009/1/9

下午 01:43:37

Elsa


But you might spend more time.
2009/1/9

下午 01:44:07

蘇菲亞


So what do you think I shoul;ld type?
2009/1/9

下午 01:44:49

Claire


So you do the topic in extensive way?
2009/1/9

下午 01:44:57

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the topic you choose may to broad for you
2009/1/9

下午 01:45:37

蘇菲亞


SO WHAT SHOULD I DO
2009/1/9

下午 01:46:44

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


you can try to key in the keywords longer and explain detailly about your subject
2009/1/9

下午 01:46:48

Elsa


It depends on what aspects you want to discuss.
2009/1/9

下午 01:46:55

Claire


To narrow down the certain point of gay
2009/1/9

下午 01:48:55

蘇菲亞


OK
2009/1/9

下午 01:49:18

蘇菲亞


( 1 ) Ideology- Queer Cinema. Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey. Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies. I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
2009/1/9

下午 01:49:28

蘇菲亞


This is my citation
2009/1/9

下午 01:49:39

蘇菲亞


The answer to the second question
2009/1/9

下午 01:50:15

蘇菲亞


( 2 ) Gay Genes, Revisited. LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844) Intended audiences: Academic paper.
2009/1/9

下午 01:50:23

蘇菲亞


The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view. Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
2009/1/9

下午 01:50:44

蘇菲亞


Do Gays Have a Choice? Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303) From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9 Intended audiences: Academic paper.
2009/1/9

下午 01:51:09

蘇菲亞


The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
2009/1/9

下午 01:51:22

蘇菲亞


( 4 ) Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan. Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
2009/1/9

下午 01:51:30

蘇菲亞


( 5 ) Could Gay be Gay? Anonymous Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1 Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
2009/1/9

下午 01:51:52

蘇菲亞


That's all to the second question.
2009/1/9

下午 01:51:56

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the first citation :i think it is great that you use the book we have studied in this semester as your reference
2009/1/9

下午 01:52:17

蘇菲亞


The fact is you have to attack me
2009/1/9

下午 01:52:24

Claire


Ideology!!!Interesting!(When night is falling )
2009/1/9

下午 01:52:37

蘇菲亞


I don't know whether I had do the citation properly.
2009/1/9

下午 01:52:48

Elsa


Ha
2009/1/9

下午 01:53:06

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the idea is great
2009/1/9

下午 01:53:12

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


BUT
2009/1/9

下午 01:53:19

蘇菲亞


BUT
2009/1/9

下午 01:54:32

Elsa


How do you use the second reference in your final paper? Since you said you are confused about that.
2009/1/9

下午 01:54:56

蘇菲亞


OH YEAH
2009/1/9

下午 01:55:17

蘇菲亞


I mean some of the idea it mentioned in the article.
2009/1/9

下午 01:55:25

蘇菲亞


Thanks
2009/1/9

下午 01:55:28

Claire


Because it's a academic paper ?
2009/1/9

下午 01:55:32

蘇菲亞


I WOULD REVISE THE SENTENSE
2009/1/9

下午 01:55:37

蘇菲亞


Yes
2009/1/9

下午 01:56:42

Elsa


You can add that if you agree with the standpoints in the sources.
2009/1/9

下午 01:56:57

Claire


Are there lot of new terms should be explained?
2009/1/9

下午 01:57:14

蘇菲亞


No.
2009/1/9

下午 01:57:31

蘇菲亞


It's not the term but the words it used in the articles.
2009/1/9

下午 01:58:50

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so you creat th eterm by tourself?
2009/1/9

下午 01:59:07

Claire


So how do you overcpme the problem?
2009/1/9

下午 01:59:08

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


sorry foe misspelling
2009/1/9

下午 01:59:26

Elsa


miss spelling: )
2009/1/9

下午 01:59:26

Claire


Sorry~
2009/1/9

下午 01:59:33

Claire


overcome
2009/1/9

下午 01:59:33

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


XDDDDDDDD
2009/1/9

下午 01:59:38

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


C
2009/1/9

下午 01:59:39

Claire


ha
2009/1/9

下午 02:00:07

蘇菲亞


the
2009/1/9

下午 02:00:12

蘇菲亞


create
2009/1/9

下午 02:00:50

Claire


?
2009/1/9

下午 02:01:31

Elsa


I want to be the next to present.
2009/1/9

下午 02:01:38

Claire


Ok~
2009/1/9

下午 02:01:41

蘇菲亞


3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them? I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
2009/1/9

下午 02:02:06

蘇菲亞


4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper? I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
2009/1/9

下午 02:02:27

蘇菲亞


5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not? I did add my peer’s opinion in my issue paper because they pointed out the shortcomings that I did not realize before.
2009/1/9

下午 02:02:48

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so do you paraphrase the qoutes
2009/1/9

下午 02:02:58

蘇菲亞


Before i want to change my position and focus on the cutural environment
2009/1/9

下午 02:03:26

蘇菲亞


but i found out that all of the infromation that i have found was about the scientific problems
2009/1/9

下午 02:03:37

蘇菲亞


yes i do qoute
2009/1/9

下午 02:04:13

Elsa


So you need to find more evidence instead of the scientific problems
2009/1/9

下午 02:04:28

Claire


What words do you quote?
2009/1/9

下午 02:04:50

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the most important thing is you need to paraphrase them in your own ideas
2009/1/9

下午 02:05:11

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


did you do that?(attacking)
2009/1/9

下午 02:05:43

蘇菲亞


(i can feel that
2009/1/9

下午 02:06:03

蘇菲亞


it's hard to say it over here
2009/1/9

下午 02:06:07

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


i know that you have paraphrased them
2009/1/9

下午 02:06:24

蘇菲亞


i had put the quotation mark in my paragraph
2009/1/9

下午 02:06:37

蘇菲亞


actually i quote
2009/1/9

下午 02:06:53

蘇菲亞


and also paraphrased
2009/1/9

下午 02:07:20

Claire


Do you have coherence between the paragraph?
2009/1/9

下午 02:08:09

Elsa


Some conjunctions
2009/1/9

下午 02:08:23

蘇菲亞


I...am not sure about that
2009/1/9

下午 02:08:35

蘇菲亞


i think i did....吧
2009/1/9

下午 02:09:06

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


do make the mistake as same as me
2009/1/9

下午 02:09:11

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


don't
2009/1/9

下午 02:09:19

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the same mistake
2009/1/9

下午 02:09:51

Elsa


Well. You can do it better when you looking your sentence again.
2009/1/9

下午 02:10:03

蘇菲亞


ok
2009/1/9

下午 02:10:05

Claire


Check it again!
2009/1/9

下午 02:10:10

蘇菲亞


so is that all?
2009/1/9

下午 02:10:15

蘇菲亞


OK!
2009/1/9

下午 02:10:29

Claire


probably~
2009/1/9

下午 02:11:07

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


when i read your annatation, i find that overally there are not some serious problems in your article
2009/1/9

下午 02:11:23

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the grammar and spelling is ok
2009/1/9

下午 02:11:36

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the coherence is not too bad
2009/1/9

下午 02:11:54

Elsa


You did a good job.
2009/1/9

下午 02:11:59

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


but you stll have to polish them into a btter one
2009/1/9

下午 02:12:01

Claire


serious problems?
2009/1/9

下午 02:12:03

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


better
2009/1/9

下午 02:12:05

Claire


So?
2009/1/9

下午 02:12:17

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the conjuntions
2009/1/9

下午 02:12:29

Elsa


conjunctions
2009/1/9

下午 02:12:32

Claire


OH! OK
2009/1/9

下午 02:14:15

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


THE MIS SPELLING AGAIN!!
2009/1/9

下午 02:14:28

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so the next parts?
2009/1/9

下午 02:15:05

Elsa


I can start to present
2009/1/9

下午 02:15:10

Elsa


?
2009/1/9

下午 02:15:11

Claire


OK
2009/1/9

下午 02:15:19

Claire


Abortion!
2009/1/9

下午 02:15:43

Elsa


Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right
2009/1/9

下午 02:16:43

Elsa


key words:abortion, women's human rights
2009/1/9

下午 02:17:10

Elsa


I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.
2009/1/9

下午 02:17:32

Elsa


1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion) 2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws) 3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)
2009/1/9

下午 02:18:13

Elsa


That's the outlines of my paper.
2009/1/9

下午 02:18:54

Elsa


2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences
2009/1/9

下午 02:19:12

Elsa


1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right. Audience: People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.
2009/1/9

下午 02:21:15

Claire


So you emphasize women's human rights?
2009/1/9

下午 02:21:30

Elsa


Yes.
2009/1/9

下午 02:21:42

Elsa


That's my main point.
2009/1/9

下午 02:21:50

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yap
2009/1/9

下午 02:21:54

Claire


Do you have other position?
2009/1/9

下午 02:21:57

Claire


Law ?
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Claire


Law of abortion!
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Elsa


Yes.
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Claire


you say you want to mention
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Elsa


(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.
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Elsa


Audience: People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.
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Elsa


4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton. Audience: People who want to know why be anti-abortion
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蘇菲亞


I THINK THAT YOUR VIEWPOINT IS CLEAR
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蘇菲亞


AND PRECISE
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Claire


Yup~
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Elsa


Thank you!
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Elsa


3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them? (1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually. (2) Those reasons can make people to t
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Elsa


(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion. (3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws. (4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.
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Claire


Is any problem you encounter in your paper?
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and you make three points in your paper
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蘇菲亞


SO YOU QOUTE
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


discuss the three reasons
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Elsa


I do qoute some words in my article
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Elsa


But not much.
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蘇菲亞


OK
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Claire


What peron do you quote?
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蘇菲亞


I THINK EVERYBODY'S PROBLEMS IS THAT WE SHOULD CHECK THE SPELLING
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蘇菲亞


THE COHERENCE
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蘇菲亞


THE CONJUNCTION
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Elsa


Yes. So the peer feedback is important
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Elsa


I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


YES I ALSO AGREE THAT
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Elsa


To the fifth question.
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Elsa


(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
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Elsa


2) I added more ideas to my final paper 1. The world trend 2. The uniqe condition of each woman 3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)
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蘇菲亞


ok
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蘇菲亞


so you have stated your position
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蘇菲亞


that's cool
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Claire


Pefect~
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Elsa


But I do not know how to conquer the weak point
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Elsa


I just avoid to talk about that part...
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


it is really hard to correct
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蘇菲亞


if i were you, i would also avoid that part...
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蘇菲亞


sorry
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蘇菲亞


let me think an\bout that
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Claire


The coherence?
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Elsa


Well... I am not sure whether my articles is coherent or not
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Claire


do you work strongly?
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Claire


And.........
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Claire


you told me that you have 6 pages "only"
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Elsa


I would try to make my article fluent
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蘇菲亞


i think we should go on to the next person
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Elsa


Ok.
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Claire


Mmmmm.....
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蘇菲亞


what is human right
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


OK
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蘇菲亞


i mean at the same time now
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


I'M NEXT
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Claire


Elsa works very hard!
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蘇菲亞


because elsa and claire had the same topic
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蘇菲亞


almost the same
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


SO CLAIRE
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Claire


different position
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


YOUR ARE THE NEXT ONE?
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Elsa


So hurry up
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Claire


I'm ok
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Elsa


Tell us the outlines in your paper
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


or i will lose my time = =
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Claire


abotion mental health
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Claire


abortion
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蘇菲亞


together
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Claire


My main outline includes abortion, and I would quote others to persuade others by using lot of science research and essay. The key words are the mental help, and psychology of abortion. Most information are English, because there are much more information what I want in the foreign website.
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下午 02:38:35

Claire


These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97, Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News, , and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times.
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蘇菲亞


mental help, and psychology of abortion.
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蘇菲亞


so you deal with the mental problem
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Claire


These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97, Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News, , and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times.
2009/1/9

下午 02:39:17

Claire


Yes
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Claire


psychology of abortion
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Elsa


So how did you deal with the other points of view such as woman's right?
2009/1/9

下午 02:41:29

Claire


I choose to be pro-lifer.
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Elsa


How did you conquer the weak point?
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Claire


I use others' words
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蘇菲亞


or baby's right
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Claire


such as the Pope
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yap
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蘇菲亞


baby's psychological problem
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Claire


It's psychological problem of women
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


i agree with sophia
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Claire


Do you mean that I should develop baby's psychological problem?
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下午 02:44:23

Claire


Then I can try.
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蘇菲亞


no
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


if you have enough time
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Claire


Ok
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蘇菲亞


because that's also elsa's problem
2009/1/9

下午 02:44:52

Claire


Thanks
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


otherwise you must reorganize your issue paper
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蘇菲亞


both of you focus on the adults
2009/1/9

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Claire


Yea
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蘇菲亞


or don't point out the word "baby"
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Elsa


I see.
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下午 02:45:51

蘇菲亞


otherwise you will have confrontation in your paper
2009/1/9

下午 02:45:56

Claire


OK
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蘇菲亞


joyce
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


ok
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Claire


come to Joyce!!
2009/1/9

下午 02:46:30

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
2009/1/9

下午 02:46:34

Claire


Go ahead!
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


this is my topic(present)
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


Focus on three parts: 1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery 2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery 3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
2009/1/9

下午 02:47:37

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so i make a deep discussion about these three topics
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下午 02:47:58

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


Search information in the key words English > “self image” “plastic surgery” Mostly in the website of the “All Business” http://www.allbusiness.com/ Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand website全國碩博士論文資訊網 http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
2009/1/9

下午 02:48:51

Elsa


I think that your standpoints are clear.
2009/1/9

下午 02:48:59

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


thx
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下午 02:49:24

蘇菲亞


but
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蘇菲亞


i don't know your viewpoints
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蘇菲亞


you support?
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


this is just the outline
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


my ideas will be in the article
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蘇菲亞


ok
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


i just categoly them
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蘇菲亞


just remind you
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下午 02:51:07

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


i know that i will pay more attentio non this part
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


it is also my main problem thx for Sophia
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
2009/1/9

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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so much = =
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Claire


From TV! It's cool.
2009/1/9

下午 02:53:54

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


every annotation stands for one point
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蘇菲亞


AND SALES
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so there are three stand points
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蘇菲亞


YOU FIND LOTS OF INFORMATION
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下午 02:54:28

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


haha
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Elsa


Don't forget to express your views when you use them.
2009/1/9

下午 02:54:39

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


are you praising me?
2009/1/9

下午 02:54:47

蘇菲亞


IN THE CONCLUSION PART YOU MIGHT WANT TO ORGANIZE THEM AGAIN IN BRIEF WORDS
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Claire


What keywords do you use?
2009/1/9

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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


i have said that = =in the above
2009/1/9

下午 02:55:27

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


attacking
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Claire


OH~sorry
2009/1/9

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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery The higher standard about aesthetic >contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


2. Annotation 2- Power of self-imThis article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives. age psychology
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance. The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Film clip The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
2009/1/9

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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so much = =
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


every annatation stands for one point
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Elsa


Do you have problems when you use these information?
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蘇菲亞


for example the meaning
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蘇菲亞


or some conflict
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yes, at first i can't find any essay on the internet
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


after a long long stuggling, i found and useful website
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


that's the begining of my annatation
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


that's why i post my articles in the blogger so late
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so sophia has pointed out that
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
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蘇菲亞


i think that you could qoate
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蘇菲亞


sometimes directly
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蘇菲亞


to be more persuasive
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Elsa


Yes.
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Elsa


Using the words from convincing resouces will helpful
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Claire


That's right~
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yap i agree with you
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


i will improve that
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蘇菲亞


SO ANY PROBLEMS?
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蘇菲亞


?
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蘇菲亞


DID YOU CHANGE YOUR POSITION
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


I THINK NOT
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


I AGREE WITH THE POINTS
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[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and i agree with the attitude toward cosmetic surgery
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Elsa


If there is no problems...
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下午 03:11:09

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


this is the end maybe

Presentation of the final paper

1. Paper outlines with the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc).

Title:
Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right

Key words:

abortion, women's human rights

I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.

Outlines:

1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion)

2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws)

3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)




2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences (e.g., general, academic, customers, peers and friends, other). Do the library and Web sources provide sound reasons and proper evidence? Do you use shared contextual knowledge (e.g.,experiences, emotions, cultures) to support your argument and opinions?

(1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right.

Audience:

People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.

(2) The second annotation is the reasons for abortion, and the match for woman to run after their rights of abortion.

Audience:

People who do not understand why woman have abortion. And the information makes them know the difficulties women face.

(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.

Audience:

People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.

(4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton.

Audience:

People who want to know why be anti-abortion


3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?

(1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually.

(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion.

(3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws.

(4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.

4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?

I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.

5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.Do you find weak reasoning and errors of logic (e.g., irrelevant, oversimplification, overgeneralization, false analogy, undefined terms, etc)? Do you change your question or problem during the course of study?

(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
(2) I added more ideas to my final paper

1. The world trend
2. The uniqe condition of each woman
3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)

Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right [draft]

Having an abortion is a common phenomenon which can be seen around the world. Taking an example from our society, September is called as a month of abortion in Taiwan. It is also a controversial issue when it comes to the election of president in America last year. There is also a report of BBC radio website indicates that one in four UK women have had a termination and the number is on the rise. Thus, the problem that how to make the choice between morality and women’s right comes to my mind. Personally, I approve that women have the right to perform the operation of abortion. No woman would make such decision casually, and we should respect women’s right of terminating or proceeding with the pregnancy.

My standpoints have in common with Obama, the President-elect in America, who thinks that abortion is about women’s right. According to the videos I found out from Youtube, Obama claimed that the law of limiting abortion would influence, even harm women’s rights. In another report of Yahoo news online, it mentioned that an Australian state, Victoria, is going to pass a bill which give women the sole choice of whether to have abortion or not. Currently, woman there can abort only when the doctor thinks pregnancy would harm the health of the mother.

From the other points of view, the anti-abortion groups insist on the human rights of the unborn babies. They hold a perspective that abortion is equal to murder the babies. The children should be treated as independent humans even they are still in the womb. From the opposite standpoints above, we can understand that the issue is really a dilemma for governments to deal with. The reason for them to be against to abortion is mainly by morality. However, do women have no rights to abort if she does not want to have a child? Does woman who get pregnant unexpectedly have to abort her baby covertly in illegal clinic?
To solve the problems, we should know the reason why women choose to have abortion at first. A news documentary on BBC radio website investigated the women who had chosen to have abortion. Tracey said that “I don't regret what I did and I still don't regret not telling my parents as I know they would have taken control, 16 is too young to have a baby, you are still so young yourself, go out and enjoy yourself before settling down, I now have 2 children and have the maturity to enjoy them.” In a news report of BBC website discussed about the reasons for abortion. Women may decide to have abortion for social reasons such as poverty. The mother is unable to cope with a child, and the mother is too young to have a child. The child is the result of crimes such as rape, incest, and child abuse. Under the situation, it is quite hard for a woman to keep the pregnancy. In addition, mother’s health including mental health, the serious physical handicaps of the children, the birth control policy of the government, and the parents’ gender selection and so forth. These are the general factors for woman to choose abortion.

After understanding the reasons and motivations for a woman to have abortion, we found out that it is really complicated for a woman to abort her child. We can not just define abortion as murder the babies, because we do not know what difficulties the woman exactly goes through. If those anti-abortion groups consider about the unique situation of each woman, maybe they would change their ideas. To have an abortion is never a simple choice for women. It is not just a question to give birth to the child or not. What women should face is the responsibility. Once you choose to give birth to the child, you are responsible to keep him or her and educate him or her. A large amount of time and money are needed, the parents should be prepared of their mental condition, too. If the woman’s economic situation does not allow her to keep her child, what can she do after her child come to the world? Abandon her baby or send her baby to an orphanage?

I believe that there must be many difficulties for a mother to make the decision of aborting her baby. If the government restricts women’s abortion rights, it may damage women’s health and become a greater problem to the society. Misunderstanding often happens when people forget to think for others. In the online resources of a magazine named Crisis has a report which introduces the march about women who strives for their abortion rights. Women are struggling to get their right of choosing whether they should abort or not through themselves. Actually, women are the protagonist of the problem, and they should have the dominance to make the decision. If people could stand by women’s side and try to respect every woman’s unique situation, maybe the problem would not trigger such a great dispute.

In my opinion, abortion is women’s basic right. To discuss about the part of human right, let’s take a look of the investigation first. According to a research paper “Developments in Laws on Induced Abortion: 1998-2007” of Journal of International Family Planning Perspectives, we can know the main trend of the legislation about abortion in different countries during 1998 to 2007. It is obvious that liberalization of abortion laws is the main trend during the last 10 years around the world. More countries have broadened the grounds of legal abortion. Since 1998, sixteen countries have increased the number of grounds on which abortions may be legally performed. Even the countries have prohibited abortion by its laws allow a part of abortion when pregnancy would hurt the mother's health. Only two countries added restriction to the laws of abortion.

The research paper supports my points of view. Banning abortion under all the conditions is impossible. If the government liberalizes the laws and makes the aborted procedures more accessible, it can reduce women's maternal mortality or morbidity. It also increases woman's human rights, because woman can be the master of her own bodies. They would not be forced to accept the child even when the child come from rape, incest, and so forth. Women are in the first place of this issue of abortion. Restrict abortion not only harm women’s human rights, but also make the secret and dangerous abortion increase. By the normal access to abortion can help women stay in a safer condition. They do not have to worry about the danger of accepting a secret procedure. If a woman considers to aborting her child, the government should provide her enough information and the result of abortion instead of limiting women’s rights. As the woman understand what abortion is, how the procedure be performed, and think about why she choose to abort her baby, she would make the most appropriate decision herself.

It can be questioned that are those who opposed to abortion really caring about women’s circumstances? Have they ever stood in women’s position? In an article “The Female Nature: A Woman's Destiny?” on the Journal of Humanist takes partial-birth abortion for example. The Congress of United States prohibits partial-birth because they think that the procedure is inhumane. There is a Justice wrote about why abortion should be banned. They suppose that woman would--and should--regret for having an abortion. Abortion violates woman’s motherhood. Therefore, the government should prohibit abortion. The other article “Abortion: we need compassion, not dogma” on the Journal of New Statesman mentions about the “pro-life” campaigners. Their aim is to stop abortion completely. Even when the limit time of abortion is cut from 24 to 20 weeks, their concern is not to save the babies who are terminated between 20 and 24 weeks, but to use a lower limit as a stepping stone to an outright ban. Most of them are motivated by religious or philosophical purpose. From the two articles, we can see that woman’s thoughts are usually to be neglected. The government, humanist, and the clergy intend to limit woman’s right to have abortion. Regardless of each woman’s unique situation, what women need is usually ignored. Why can they force woman to accept their arbitrary decision? When it comes to a woman’s set of circumstances, we should respect the necessity of woman to make such choice in the first place. There is no denying that woman is the person who involved. However, most of the legislative commissioners who decided the policy are males. Did they really know what woman confront? Or they just limit woman’s rights by the slogan of humanism?

Morality and humanism is the main standpoints for those who oppose to abortion. The anti-abortion groups care about the unborn baby more than the mother who is pregnant. Nevertheless, the role mother plays is actually the most important one. The mother has to face all the problems when she decides to give birth to her baby. What women need is compassion, instead of the dogma and condemnation. Anti-abortion groups condemn women’s behavior of aborting the babies, but such condemnation is meaningless if they can not provide any way to solve women’s complicated problems under each particular condition.

Instead of feeling regretful to have a baby, it is much better to have a correct idea about sex, especially for those juveniles. Our society should provide more information about sex. People should make use of condoms and contraceptive drugs to prevent pregnancy if they do not want to have children.

Book Review [MSN]

2008/12/30

下午 10:10:13

友君


Sorry for late.
2008/12/30

下午 10:11:08




涵兒 加入對話。
2008/12/30

下午 10:11:29

蘇菲亞


So that's start
2008/12/30

下午 10:11:39

友君


Ok.
2008/12/30

下午 10:11:49

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two hours discussing
2008/12/30

下午 10:11:59

涵兒


ok~
2008/12/30

下午 10:13:21

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so first of all
2008/12/30

下午 10:13:31

蘇菲亞


As for me, I think that Chapter 18 "Writing about Film" is my favorite chapter
2008/12/30

下午 10:13:54

友君


Me too.
2008/12/30

下午 10:14:14

友君


And your report also impressed me.
2008/12/30

下午 10:14:27

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MOVIE
2008/12/30

下午 10:14:42

蘇菲亞


We could connect the chapter with "Understanding Movies"
2008/12/30

下午 10:14:47

涵兒


It's good~
2008/12/30

下午 10:14:52

蘇菲亞


Oh I am flattered
2008/12/30

下午 10:15:22

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haha
2008/12/30

下午 10:15:22

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I THINK
2008/12/30

下午 10:16:02

友君


The clips you chose connect with our Film class.
2008/12/30

下午 10:16:16

友君


Run Lora Run
2008/12/30

下午 10:16:31

涵兒


When we are talking about movies, I think I would come up with Jerome Class~
2008/12/30

下午 10:16:51

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or stewart
2008/12/30

下午 10:17:08

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stewart also talks movie in the oral training class
2008/12/30

下午 10:17:18

涵兒


It's impressive to see the same clips in different classes!
2008/12/30

下午 10:18:40

友君


And analyze the photography. Just like what we do on Jerome's class.
2008/12/30

下午 10:19:28

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but can't put more emphasis on movie
2008/12/30

下午 10:20:28

友君


Yes. I think we can talk about some writing skill in the text book.
2008/12/30

下午 10:21:29

涵兒


Our group is talking about "Writing about Literature".
2008/12/30

下午 10:22:25

友君


There are some things have to do when we are going to write or analyze the literature work.
2008/12/30

下午 10:22:41

涵兒


I think it also applies to our reading in English or American literature.
2008/12/30

下午 10:23:22

友君


We need to know what the author wants to express first.
2008/12/30

下午 10:23:38

友君


and provide our own interpretation.
2008/12/30

下午 10:24:54

蘇菲亞


Yes, and that's really important, too
2008/12/30

下午 10:24:54

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i think we can list some important writing skills
2008/12/30

下午 10:25:02

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yeah
2008/12/30

下午 10:25:04

友君


Ok.
2008/12/30

下午 10:25:49

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


　
2008/12/30

下午 10:26:10

友君


Recongnize your purpose.
2008/12/30

下午 10:27:34

友君


The first main point in chapter 11 and chapter 12. (Description and Narration)
2008/12/30

下午 10:28:35

涵兒


Put your purpose under arrangement
2008/12/30

下午 10:28:45

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yeah the writing skill
2008/12/30

下午 10:29:26

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


argumentation
2008/12/30

下午 10:29:26

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


decription
2008/12/30

下午 10:29:46

蘇菲亞


By the way, we have to know who are the readers
2008/12/30

下午 10:30:27

涵兒


To interest the readers~
2008/12/30

下午 10:30:37

涵兒


with your own topic!
2008/12/30

下午 10:30:50

友君


You need to make your readers be convinced.
2008/12/30

下午 10:32:02

友君


Some experiences can support your perspective.
2008/12/30

下午 10:33:38

蘇菲亞


You are right
2008/12/30

下午 10:34:08

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so we have to divide our paper in many parts
2008/12/30

下午 10:34:18

蘇菲亞


So we have to choose our subject carefully
2008/12/30

下午 10:36:22

友君


Also, choose to describe things in objective or subjective way.
2008/12/30

下午 10:37:15

涵兒


And supporting our ideas with some research.
2008/12/30

下午 10:37:29

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yeah
2008/12/30

下午 10:37:44

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and try to convince audieance
2008/12/30

下午 10:37:49

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


audience
2008/12/30

下午 10:38:29

蘇菲亞


you really did point out the point
2008/12/30

下午 10:38:40

友君


Make readers see what you have found out and feel as your feeling.
2008/12/30

下午 10:39:26

蘇菲亞


Yeah, things that can move us can have stonger impact in our heart
2008/12/30

下午 10:39:47

蘇菲亞


It's just like Approach to American Literature
2008/12/30

下午 10:39:57

蘇菲亞


HAHA
2008/12/30

下午 10:40:17

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and oral training
2008/12/30

下午 10:40:26

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


gee gee
2008/12/30

下午 10:41:11

涵兒


Yup~
2008/12/30

下午 10:41:11

友君


HA~The same skills can be used in all the classes.
2008/12/30

下午 10:43:27

蘇菲亞


hA
2008/12/30

下午 10:43:37

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剛剛斷線
2008/12/30

下午 10:43:47

涵兒


That's OK :)
2008/12/30

下午 10:43:47

蘇菲亞


THAT'S OK
2008/12/30

下午 10:43:57

蘇菲亞


WE DON'T CARE THAT MUCH
2008/12/30

下午 10:43:57

蘇菲亞


HAHA
2008/12/30

下午 10:45:45

友君


Besides, we can make our essays vivid by using sensory details.
2008/12/30

下午 10:46:06

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yeah
2008/12/30

下午 10:46:16

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


tha;t the description
2008/12/30

下午 10:46:25

友君


Sight, hearing, smell...
2008/12/30

下午 10:46:25

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the chapter i report
2008/12/30

下午 10:46:25

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


= =
2008/12/30

下午 10:46:52

涵兒


YA
2008/12/30

下午 10:47:17

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so it's the writting skill
2008/12/30

下午 10:48:39

友君


Always asking "WHY" is also important
2008/12/30

下午 10:48:44

涵兒


And with some logic in writting skills.
2008/12/30

下午 10:48:54

蘇菲亞


After finishing writing the articles, we have to revise them.
2008/12/30

下午 10:49:04

蘇菲亞


"Ask Why"
2008/12/30

下午 10:49:25

蘇菲亞


can be related to the Accounting class XD
2008/12/30

下午 10:49:45

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so that;s the chapter 5
2008/12/30

下午 10:50:40

蘇菲亞


1. What is the most interesting part and persuasive point in your essay.
2008/12/30

下午 10:50:54

友君


It is also needed when we are reading a story or poem.
2008/12/30

下午 10:51:04

蘇菲亞


2.Is your topic too broad or too narrow
2008/12/30

下午 10:51:29

蘇菲亞


3. What aspects might need more work
2008/12/30

下午 10:51:44

蘇菲亞


4.Does specific idea support your idea
2008/12/30

下午 10:51:59

蘇菲亞


Give out your position
2008/12/30

下午 10:52:09

蘇菲亞


That's what we have to check out
2008/12/30

下午 10:52:24

蘇菲亞


I agree your point
2008/12/30

下午 10:52:29

涵兒


Yup.
2008/12/30

下午 10:52:49

蘇菲亞


All of the writing skill could be used in different types of writing
2008/12/30

下午 10:53:05

友君


Yeah. You listed the points we should pay attention to.
2008/12/30

下午 10:53:41

涵兒


After writing, we also need to revise~
2008/12/30

下午 10:55:03

友君


How to organize your essay effectively is significant.
2008/12/30

下午 10:55:03

涵兒


Many problems in sentence clarity involve errors in grammar, punctuation, word choice and usage.
2008/12/30

下午 10:55:55

友君


Sometimes the readers might have trouble to understand.
2008/12/30

下午 10:56:31

涵兒


1. Give your sentences content.
2008/12/30

下午 10:57:02

涵兒


2. Make your sentences specific.
2008/12/30

下午 10:57:33

涵兒


3. Avoid overpacking your sentences.
2008/12/30

下午 10:57:53

涵兒


4. Fix fragments
2008/12/30

下午 10:58:14

涵兒


5. Pay attention to word order.
2008/12/30

下午 10:59:05

涵兒


This is the important points in Chapter 6.
2008/12/30

下午 10:59:35

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yeah
2008/12/30

下午 10:59:54

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so it seems that we have lots of things to talk
2008/12/30

下午 11:00:12

友君


That is talking about how to make our meanings clear in each sentences.
2008/12/30

下午 11:00:48

蘇菲亞


yes
2008/12/30

下午 11:00:48

涵兒


I think developing a concise style is also important~
2008/12/30

下午 11:00:58

蘇菲亞


tha's true
2008/12/30

下午 11:02:45

友君


It is necessary to build argument when we are writing.
2008/12/30

下午 11:03:45

友君


Explore the possibilities and your opinions.
2008/12/30

下午 11:04:11

友君


Anticipate opposing views.
2008/12/30

下午 11:04:56

涵兒


The classmates' comments are also very helpful~
2008/12/30

下午 11:05:41

蘇菲亞


In chapter 10 for example, when writing an argumentation esay, we have to use "appropriate tone"
2008/12/30

下午 11:05:41

友君


Just like what Claire and I do. We have different standpoint toward abortion.
2008/12/30

下午 11:05:57

蘇菲亞


yeah
2008/12/30

下午 11:06:07

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yeah
2008/12/30

下午 11:06:17

蘇菲亞


different people can find out one another's weak point
2008/12/30

下午 11:06:27

蘇菲亞


they could offer us some precious opinion
2008/12/30

下午 11:07:18

涵兒


Yup~
2008/12/30

下午 11:07:35

友君


And we also have to fight with each other to strengthen our viewpoint.
2008/12/30

下午 11:09:27

蘇菲亞


that;s right
2008/12/30

下午 11:09:47

涵兒


Others' pointview can complement our views.
2008/12/30

下午 11:09:57

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


fight with othersXD
2008/12/30

下午 11:10:21

友君


The point of view.
2008/12/30

下午 11:10:28

涵兒


I usually fight with Elsa in the dorm. XXD
2008/12/30

下午 11:10:43

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


XDD
2008/12/30

下午 11:10:53

蘇菲亞


cool
2008/12/30

下午 11:10:54

友君


No. That's not true~~~~
2008/12/30

下午 11:11:03

友君


Haha
2008/12/30

下午 11:11:13

涵兒


Since both of us are making the same topic.
2008/12/30

下午 11:11:23

蘇菲亞


I would so much like to hit my room mates
2008/12/30

下午 11:11:44

涵兒


Ha~~
2008/12/30

下午 11:11:54

蘇菲亞


by discussing your topics, I think you can really get some new ideas
2008/12/30

下午 11:12:04

蘇菲亞


new concept
2008/12/30

下午 11:12:35

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


YEAH
2008/12/30

下午 11:12:45

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


i agree with it
2008/12/30

下午 11:13:05

蘇菲亞


seeing the opposite point of views, you can find ways to "fight" back people that's in different position
2008/12/30

下午 11:13:14

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and other people will also give you advice
2008/12/30

下午 11:13:36

友君


Yeah.
2008/12/30

下午 11:14:55

友君


Maybe we can talk about some problems should be avoid.
2008/12/30

下午 11:15:36

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


grammar false
2008/12/30

下午 11:15:56

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


unorganized article
2008/12/30

下午 11:16:17

涵兒


wrong word choice.
2008/12/30

下午 11:16:41

友君


Sudden change in perspective.
2008/12/30

下午 11:19:13

蘇菲亞


Chapter20
2008/12/30

下午 11:19:43

蘇菲亞


It also pointed out some problems about errors in grammar
2008/12/30

下午 11:20:03

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yap
2008/12/30

下午 11:20:43

蘇菲亞


In Chapter 21,also, talks of the importance of using punctuation
2008/12/30

下午 11:20:58

涵兒


Yes~
2008/12/30

下午 11:21:03

蘇菲亞


that's also the problems we should avoid
2008/12/30

下午 11:21:13

涵兒


It does help~
2008/12/30

下午 11:22:01

友君


Yes. It is the basic problems we should pay attention to.
2008/12/30

下午 11:22:47

涵兒


But after getting lots of information in writing skills, I think when I start to write something, I still lose some points.
2008/12/30

下午 11:24:02

友君


It is hard to achieve all the points, so we have to learn and revise.
2008/12/30

下午 11:24:47

涵兒


Revising is important:)
2008/12/30

下午 11:27:01

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so we need to overcome these obstacles
2008/12/30

下午 11:27:30

友君


The order of time and space the transitional words are needed to be consider. (Chapter 3)
2008/12/30

下午 11:28:25

友君


Repetition of key words~
2008/12/30

下午 11:29:05

友君


When we arrange the paragraphs
2008/12/30

下午 11:31:10

涵兒


To present a clear thesis.
2008/12/30

下午 11:37:16

友君


The beginnings and endings are the main factors to attract the readers.
2008/12/30

下午 11:38:28

涵兒


Mmmm.....
2008/12/30

下午 11:38:58

蘇菲亞


YES
2008/12/30

下午 11:39:19

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


YEAH
2008/12/30

下午 11:39:19

涵兒


Don't introduce new points or irrelevant material.
2008/12/30

下午 11:39:29

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


you guys really point out many ideas
2008/12/30

下午 11:39:50

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


but we think we need to organized them
2008/12/30

下午 11:40:53

友君


Ok.
2008/12/30

下午 11:41:19

涵兒


Yup~
2008/12/30

下午 11:42:39

蘇菲亞


oh
2008/12/30

下午 11:42:39

蘇菲亞


by the way
2008/12/30

下午 11:42:50

蘇菲亞


I THINK THAT
2008/12/30

下午 11:43:30

蘇菲亞


Chapter 14 is really important
2008/12/30

下午 11:43:50

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


YEAH
2008/12/30

下午 11:43:57

蘇菲亞


I learned the style this semester
2008/12/30

下午 11:44:03

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


that's what teacher focus on
2008/12/30

下午 11:44:07

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


why
2008/12/30

下午 11:44:07

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


= =
2008/12/30

下午 11:44:12

蘇菲亞


before, I would just post the website
2008/12/30

下午 11:44:22

涵兒


Ok~
2008/12/30

下午 11:44:27

蘇菲亞


or simply paste the name of the author
2008/12/30

下午 11:44:43

蘇菲亞


and would not do it in the rigt form
2008/12/30

下午 11:45:32

友君


It is also important to search the online databases with concise keyword.
2008/12/30

下午 11:45:58

涵兒


It's important to have work cited.
2008/12/30

下午 11:47:02

友君


I usually ignored the citation in the past, too.
2008/12/30

下午 11:48:08

涵兒


It's easy to forget ="=
2008/12/30

下午 11:49:18

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


haha
2008/12/30

下午 11:49:38

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


take advantage of the websites
2008/12/30

下午 11:49:49

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the digital resourses
2008/12/30

下午 11:50:59

蘇菲亞


yeah
2008/12/30

下午 11:51:40

蘇菲亞


So shall we start to organize our conversation
2008/12/30

下午 11:53:09

涵兒


YA
2008/12/30

下午 11:53:20

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


ok
2008/12/30

下午 11:53:30

蘇菲亞


First of all, we have to discover our writing. We have to change our style of writing and the form of composing our works so as to meet different readers request.
2008/12/30

下午 11:54:19

蘇菲亞


Organize our writings with clear thesis statement, and remenber do not be vague in the writing.
2008/12/30

下午 11:55:09

涵兒


We can make our paper better by revising.
2008/12/30

下午 11:55:19

蘇菲亞


Pay attention to our writings by using precise words and punctuation.
2008/12/30

下午 11:55:28

友君


Avoid grammar and puntuation problems.
2008/12/30

下午 11:55:38

蘇菲亞


Do not confuse the readers.
2008/12/30

下午 11:56:15

蘇菲亞


Class discussion is also important. We can talk with our friends about our topics.
2008/12/30

下午 11:56:45

蘇菲亞


Everyone of us may point out the strong and weak point of our works.
2008/12/30

下午 11:57:05

友君


Organize each paragraph logically. Make the argument and your interpretation clearly.
2008/12/30

下午 11:57:21

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yeap
2008/12/30

下午 11:57:56

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so let's divide our discussion into many parts
2008/12/30

下午 11:58:47

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


first, the general ideas about this book?? whcih parts affect you the most
2008/12/31

上午 12:01:05

友君


Some general ideas have mentioned before.
2008/12/31

上午 12:01:10

涵兒


I think the book gives me a useful skills about writing; And I think all of the parts are essential for me to develop the issue. Different parts focus on different skills.
2008/12/31

上午 12:02:21

蘇菲亞


Later on could we compose our 500 words of book review by using some of the sentences in our conversation?
2008/12/31

上午 12:02:52

蘇菲亞


Or shall we write the entire one with different styles and ways?
2008/12/31

上午 12:03:02

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so do we need to distribute these jobs
2008/12/31

上午 12:04:02

涵兒


Maybe it works.
2008/12/31

上午 12:04:33

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


or we need to find someone to puzzle our discussion up
2008/12/31

上午 12:06:05

友君


I do not know what the teacher wants...
2008/12/31

上午 12:06:30

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


haha
2008/12/31

上午 12:07:01

涵兒


Me, either.....
2008/12/31

上午 12:07:11

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


XDD
2008/12/31

上午 12:07:48

蘇菲亞


She wants us to introduce the book
2008/12/31

上午 12:08:08

蘇菲亞


and point out what's our favorite part of the book.
2008/12/31

上午 12:08:18

蘇菲亞


so how shall we divide our work?
2008/12/31

上午 12:09:08

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


OK
2008/12/31

上午 12:09:44

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


first, who is responsible to make a concise introduction of this book?
2008/12/31

上午 12:09:54

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and then
2008/12/31

上午 12:10:15

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


some people do the middle parts
2008/12/31

上午 12:10:25

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


what are our favorite parts
2008/12/31

上午 12:10:35

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


this can use our diologues
2008/12/31

上午 12:10:59

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


what do you think about
2008/12/31

上午 12:12:24

蘇菲亞


Or we could compose it with the dialogue over here?
2008/12/31

上午 12:12:49

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


can we?
2008/12/31

上午 12:13:04

蘇菲亞


I don't think it is a good idea to separate one article into four parts
2008/12/31

上午 12:13:19

涵兒


Yes~
2008/12/31

上午 12:13:22

友君


I think we can take advantage of the dialogues.
2008/12/31

上午 12:14:18

友君


and write the chapter we liked
2008/12/31

上午 12:15:21

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yeah
2008/12/31

上午 12:15:31

涵兒


OK
2008/12/31

上午 12:15:31

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


this mentioned beforeXD
2008/12/31

上午 12:15:42

友君


We can write the introduction, our favorite and impressed chapters, and then what we have used in our paper.
2008/12/31

上午 12:16:07

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


YEAH
2008/12/31

上午 12:16:50

涵兒


OK//
2008/12/31

上午 12:18:46

友君


Do you mean that we have to introduce some main points in each chapter? Each one provide introduction of some chapters?
2008/12/31

上午 12:19:41

涵兒


I agree.
2008/12/31

上午 12:20:12

友君


So~
2008/12/31

上午 12:20:27

蘇菲亞


So~
2008/12/31

上午 12:20:27

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the generanl introduction of this book
2008/12/31

上午 12:20:37

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


genearl introduction
2008/12/31

上午 12:20:48

蘇菲亞


I can organize that in the papers
2008/12/31

上午 12:21:08

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


just like you need to introduce this book to other people
2008/12/31

上午 12:21:08

蘇菲亞


by means of the dialogue
2008/12/31

上午 12:21:18

蘇菲亞


and I would send them to one of you
2008/12/31

上午 12:21:18

涵兒


That's all？
2008/12/31

上午 12:21:28

蘇菲亞


and then send it to the third people
2008/12/31

上午 12:21:34

蘇菲亞


and to the forth
2008/12/31

上午 12:21:39

蘇菲亞


how about that
2008/12/31

上午 12:21:51

友君


I think I can do that part myself
2008/12/31

上午 12:22:16

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:04): She wants us to introduce the book 蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:04): and point out what's our favorite part of the book.
2008/12/31

上午 12:22:16

涵兒


Ｓｏ？
2008/12/31

上午 12:22:25

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


ok
2008/12/31

上午 12:22:34

友君


Ok
2008/12/31

上午 12:23:39

蘇菲亞


what
2008/12/31

上午 12:23:39

蘇菲亞


?
2008/12/31

上午 12:23:59

蘇菲亞


so we would do the separate part?
2008/12/31

上午 12:24:10

蘇菲亞


so who is going to combine ti
2008/12/31

上午 12:24:10

蘇菲亞


it
2008/12/31

上午 12:26:31

友君


We need to have the same introduction？
2008/12/31

上午 12:26:59

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


the generanl introduction of this book
2008/12/31

上午 12:27:06

友君


Sorry, I do not know what I should do now
2008/12/31

上午 12:27:12

蘇菲亞


I will do that
2008/12/31

上午 12:27:42

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


just like you need to introduce this book to other people
2008/12/31

上午 12:29:02

涵兒


OH~
2008/12/31

上午 12:29:02

蘇菲亞


==
2008/12/31

上午 12:29:22

蘇菲亞


only a person need to do that
2008/12/31

上午 12:29:31

友君


Ok
2008/12/31

上午 12:30:47

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


sopia will be responsible for the introduction
2008/12/31

上午 12:31:11

友君


Thank you.
2008/12/31

上午 12:31:42

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


then we need two person to organize our diologue
2008/12/31

上午 12:31:51

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and do the middle part
2008/12/31

上午 12:32:06

蘇菲亞


to form the introduction?
2008/12/31

上午 12:32:26

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


explain some chapter that you think important
2008/12/31

上午 12:32:30

友君


Ok. Claire and I can take it
2008/12/31

上午 12:32:55

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


ok
2008/12/31

上午 12:33:05

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


then i will do ....??
2008/12/31

上午 12:33:05

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


haha
2008/12/31

上午 12:33:35

蘇菲亞


you can form the introduction with me
2008/12/31

上午 12:33:46

蘇菲亞


o k
2008/12/31

上午 12:33:46

蘇菲亞


?
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:06

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


Ok
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:06

涵兒


OK~
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:06

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


deal
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:16

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


good
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:16

涵兒


thanks you:D
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:16

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


it's close to the end
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:27

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


so touching
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:37

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


T^T
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:37

涵兒


The End YA
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:57

蘇菲亞


More than hours
2008/12/31

上午 12:34:57

蘇菲亞


haha
2008/12/31

上午 12:35:07

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


AND
2008/12/31

上午 12:35:17

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


after we finish our parts
2008/12/31

上午 12:35:28

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


we need to organize again
2008/12/31

上午 12:35:28

涵兒


囧
2008/12/31

上午 12:35:38

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


to make the article smooth
2008/12/31

上午 12:35:48

涵兒


OK
2008/12/31

上午 12:35:48

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and coherent
2008/12/31

上午 12:36:08

蘇菲亞


when will you finish it?
2008/12/31

上午 12:36:29

涵兒


Mmm....
2008/12/31

上午 12:37:24

友君


I would put them on blog before 1/2
2008/12/31

上午 12:37:39

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


ok
2008/12/31

上午 12:37:50

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


after we finish our parts
2008/12/31

上午 12:38:00

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


just put the blogger
2008/12/31

上午 12:38:10

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


and after the vacation
2008/12/31

上午 12:38:31

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


we find some time to organize it
2008/12/31

上午 12:38:41

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


~the end~
2008/12/31

上午 12:38:45

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


yeah
2008/12/31

上午 12:38:48

友君


See you.
2008/12/31

上午 12:38:51

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


enjoy you vacation
2008/12/31

上午 12:38:56

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


happt new year
2008/12/31

上午 12:39:06

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


哈哈哈哈哈
2008/12/31

上午 12:39:36

涵兒


Happy New Year!
2008/12/31

上午 12:40:07

蘇菲亞


Bye
2008/12/31

上午 12:40:17

涵兒


See you~
2008/12/31

上午 12:40:28

涵兒


bye
2008/12/31

上午 12:40:38

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


bye
2008/12/31

上午 12:41:08

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


remember to put the diologue in your blogger
2008/12/31

上午 12:41:19

[ 耐心 patient] ：)


everyone needs it

Book Review [Group Essay]

This semester we have learned lots of writing skills and the steps of how to write an essay from the book “Steps to Writing Well” written by Jean Wyrick. This book guides us to write a variety of essays by following the steps from the basic elements to the advanced skills which provides us an elementary direction to the world of writing. In the following, we would make a brief introduction of this book.

When composing works, we need to pay attention to several problems. Firstly, discover our audience is important. We have to change our style of writing and the form of composing our works so as to meet different readers request. Remember to organize our writings with clear thesis statements; we should not bore them with confusion, and disorder. Thus, to interest the readers with a sexy topic is really important. Also, choose to describe things in objective or subjective way. Different writing categories such as argumentations and descriptions have different writing methods. Secondly, try to convince the readers with abundant evidences to support our ideas. Besides, we can make our essays vivid by using sensory details. Thirdly, after finishing writing the articles, we have to revise them. Think of the questions such as whether the topics are too broad or too narrow, does specific ideas support our viewpoint and so on. Grammar, punctuation, word choice and usage are also what we should pay attention to. In addition, we could also ask someone else to look over our works, because with their help, we could find out more faults that we have not realized. Last but not the least, we have to write down the citation in a proper format.

All of these writing skills are contained in the book and really offers us a clear and complete guideline to writing well. Besides the brief introduction of this book, the following are some of the favorite chapters we think of as the most important and impress us the most.

To begin with, we discussed about which chapter is our favorite one. Most of us thought that Chapter 18 “Writing about Film” is the most impressive and interesting chapter. Sophia’s group introduced about how to analyze a film, and the clips they chose made their report become more abundant. We also connected this chapter with Jerome’s film class and Stewart’s movie discussion class. Then, we turned to regard some important writing skills when we are going to organize an essay. Recognizing your purpose and choosing the topic carefully should be consider in the first place. Knowing who the readers are, trying to interest and convince them with your unique viewpoints and feelings are significant. In addition, providing specific examples to support your ideas, building the arguments and giving out your position are necessary, too. In chapter 10, using appropriate tone and seeing the opposite points of view could help us to fight against those people who have opposite opinions.

Afterwards, the problems we should avoid became our discussing topic. In chapter 20 and 21, the usage of grammar and punctuation are pointed out. The order of time and space and the transitional words between each paragraph are also needed to be considered. Besides, we learned how to put the source and the author’s name in a correct form in chapter 14. The citation made the reference we used clearly. When we are going to write an article, remember to use the concise words and keep asking “why”. It can help us to express our meanings more concrete. At last, by the process of revising, our defects of writing can be improved. It is the only way to make our articles become better and smoothly.